We know that there are too many net bars around us. The Internet can make
our lives interesting and enjoyable. Many of us like going online very much
because we can learn how to use the computer and can get more information from
the Internet. We can learn English. We can read some good newspapers and
magazines. It can make us clever to play computer games. We can send e-mails to
our friends quickly. We can chat freely online with our friends. It can help us
get in touch with people from all over the world. But some students spend too
much time in playing computer games and some stay in the net bars all day and
all night. Some girls even get to have boyfriends or some boys get to have
girlfriends online. They write too many letters to each other. It takes them too
much time to chat online, so they do worse and worse in their lessons and they
don’t study well any more. I think we mustn’t be online when it is time for us
to study. We can do it in summer or winter holidays. I think we should go online
with adults — our teachers or parents.
Fantastic You are good at using attributive clauses in your writing. The
"struck" sentence is perfectly used. You'd better use "third person" in the
first para. It's good to use the past tense in your writing.
发表于 2016-7-29 16:23:47