2016年华附AP入学考试写作回忆

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　　2016年4.17日华附AP入学考试写作题：
        　　汽车的好处以及对环境的影响？
        　　如何写出这道题好的开头呢？张腾老师研究出了几百种开头的写法，今天给大家讲解一种写作方法，排比对比式背景导入法来进行亮点导入。开头分两个部分，一个是亮点导入来突出汽车的重要性，第二部分用汽车对环境的影响来巧妙的回应，将题目两个部分进行了完美结合。来看看张腾老师中英文的事例分析：
        　　有人从没骑过自行车，有人从没坐过飞机，但在一个现代化的城市或是在一个发达的国家，几乎每个人都坐过汽车。在这很多交通工具中，汽车的影响无疑是最大的。我们禁不住感叹这个便利的发明给人们的日常生活带来的历史性变化。然而，汽车拥有者数量的增加也导致了很多负面影响，这已经引起了政府的强烈关注。
        　　There are people who never ridden a bicycle, and people who have never been on an airplane but it would be hard to find a person in modern urban society or any developed country who has never been in a car. Of these modes of transportation, the automobile undoubtedly has had the greatest impact. We couldn’t help marveling at the historic change such a convenient invention brought to people’s daily lives. Nevertheless, the increase in the number of car owners is incurring many negative effects, which has already aroused the intensive concern of the government.

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        　　接下来进入body段的写作部分，先说汽车的好处，解释后马上通过国内外例子的阐述进行论证。
        　　首先，汽车产生的一个重要影响是，由于流动性的极大提高，人们的休闲方式也随之发生重大的改变。人们不仅能够住在离工作地点比较远的地方，在闲暇时还能四处去旅行，旅行一天，一星期或更长的时间都可以。在美国，汽车显然是最常用的交通工具，而且对旅游业产生巨大的影响。在北京，我们可以看到，现在有越来越多的人在周末和节假日期间开车外出旅游。
        　　Above all, One important impact the automobile has had is that the greatly increased mobility led to significant changes in leisure lifestyle. In addition to being able to live far from one’s place of work, people could travel far and wide for leisure, be it only for a day trip , a weekend, or an extended period of time. In the U.S.the car is by far the most common mode of transportation and has greatly impacted the growth of the tourist industry. Again , we are beginning to see people in Beijing with cars going out of the city on weekends and holidays.
        　　上段说完汽车的好处后，后面说出汽车对环境的影响，起承转合下，进行过渡。里面把汽车尾气，二氧化碳，资源浪费进行论证排比的讲解，达到了论证充分的作用。  
        　　汽车的使用严重威胁着我们的环境。如果这个趋势未能及时得到控制，在未来，地球就不再适合人类生存了。人们不得不面对这个无法逃避的现实。每年数以千计的私家汽车排出数吨尾气，造成严重空气污染。二氧化碳引起全球范围的温室效应，导致海平面上升并对天气产生不良影响。此外，由于私家车的生产，越来越多的能源也遭到了浪费。为了建设资源节约型和环境友好型的社会，人们理应少开车。
        　　The use of cars remarkably threatens our environment. If such a tendency is not brought under control in time, the Earth will no longer be a suitable place for humans to survive in the future. People have to face the music . It is a reality from which no one is able to escape . Every year, thousands of private cars are emitting tons of exhausted gas that seriously pollutes the air. The carbon dioxide leads to the worldwide greenhouse effect, which causes the sea level to rise and produces negative impacts on weather. In addition, more energy is being wasted because of the production of private cars. In order to build a resource-conserving and environment-friendly society , people ought to reduce the use of cars.

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        　　结尾除了给予总结的正常论述外，还给予了解决的方法和建议，这样的论述更具说服力。
             总之，汽车极大地改变了人们的生活方式，其影响要超过其他任何一种交通工具。但最终消除过度使用汽车造成的环境危害是全世界长久树立的目标，这是一个艰巨的任务。然而，通过顺利实施更多有效的交通法律法规以及提高公共意识, 汽车的污染问题将会减少。
        　　 In conclusion ,the automobile , more than any other mode of transportation, has greatly changed people’s lives. It is a long-cherished aim of the whole world to finally eliminate the harms done by people’s excessive use of private cars. In no way is it an easy task. Nonetheless, through the smooth implementation of more efficient traffic laws and regulations as well as the enhanced awareness of the public，the pollution of cars will be reduced.